first draft: As Simple As That

Anyone who's watched this journal knew it was just a matter of time . . . and here it is, the extremely problematic, yes-I'm-embarrassed-to-post-this first draft of As Simple As That.

Strangely enough, looking at it now I'm amazed at how much made it into the final version. And the beginning isn't too bad, although I do think it bounces too much between suddenly fluffy and suddenly angsty moments -- the overall tone got much more even after I switched to the Doctor's POV. As for the end . . . ack, cringe.

( And here's the first draft. )

first draft: As Simple As That

Anyone who's watched this journal knew it was just a matter of time . . . and here it is, the extremely problematic, yes-I'm-embarrassed-to-post-this first draft of As Simple As That.

Strangely enough, looking at it now I'm amazed at how much made it into the final version. And the beginning isn't too bad, although I do think it bounces too much between suddenly fluffy and suddenly angsty moments -- the overall tone got much more even after I switched to the Doctor's POV. As for the end . . . ack, cringe.

( And here's the first draft. )